tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post3234877964350525946..comments2024-03-12T20:14:12.308-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: ONLY I AM LEFT TO TELL THE TALE_SHOW VERSUS TELL BLOGFEST entryRoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-29751801975972415542011-01-17T13:12:25.094-06:002011-01-17T13:12:25.094-06:00Margo : Thanks for the award and liking my TELL. T...Margo : Thanks for the award and liking my TELL. The flu had me sleeping 15 hours straight so I am just now coming out of my flu cave.<br /><br />Jennifer : My writing is matching my lacerated throat this morning. LOL. Thanks so much for liking Victor's "voice" in this piece.<br /><br />Jules : Thanks for the award. You and Margo are too kind. I tried to put the reader in the moment. You made a coughing, struggling writer very happy, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-2141553046729819762011-01-17T08:01:58.382-06:002011-01-17T08:01:58.382-06:00Lord, I felt this as if I was there! BTW, I have s...Lord, I felt this as if I was there! BTW, I have something for you on my blog :D<br /><a href="http://fragilemouse.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow</a>Juleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02136045025997662057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-79371300108872038982011-01-17T03:39:33.416-06:002011-01-17T03:39:33.416-06:00Love your writing! So raw and you have such a grea...Love your writing! So raw and you have such a great voice.Jennifer Hillierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15783975547643539868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-18438714633706375912011-01-17T00:25:10.912-06:002011-01-17T00:25:10.912-06:00Oh my! What fun! And, by the way, :) I have an awa...Oh my! What fun! And, by the way, :) I have an award for you on my blog: www.margokelly.blogspot.com come stop by and pick it up! It will be available Monday morning.Margo Kellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13474612650116392270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-74315064001088757212011-01-16T19:07:05.825-06:002011-01-16T19:07:05.825-06:00Charity : Victor certainly has presence, doesn'...Charity : Victor certainly has presence, doesn't he? I'm happy you enjoyed his never-say-die attitude. Have a great new week, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-786790366145328742011-01-16T18:38:12.271-06:002011-01-16T18:38:12.271-06:00I read the tell first and enjoyed it, but I loved ...I read the tell first and enjoyed it, but I loved the attitude and voice in the show version. Wonderful as always, Roland.Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-35255480891611609402011-01-16T15:13:51.901-06:002011-01-16T15:13:51.901-06:00Words Crafter : Poor Victor has really had a hard ...Words Crafter : Poor Victor has really had a hard time of it, but he's found friends, like you say, that are worth the rough road it took to get to them! And yes, he does have an ounce or two of courage and about ten pounds of attitude! LOL!Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-7224851339051020202011-01-16T14:52:29.924-06:002011-01-16T14:52:29.924-06:00Bless him! He really has a tough life. I'm gla...Bless him! He really has a tough life. I'm glad he has good friends and an ounce or two *wink* of courage!The Words Crafterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14520267901489487512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-55538264846191426242011-01-16T11:41:31.719-06:002011-01-16T11:41:31.719-06:00Michael : Like you, I feel TELLING can be done wel...Michael : Like you, I feel TELLING can be done well and entertaininly. I think the writing teachers fear that too much TELLING can make the reader feel distant from the action. But like you said, if done well, there is nothing wrong with it.<br /><br />Thanks for the kind words. Now, I'm off to the blood wars solo!Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-17608147986951701012011-01-16T11:36:52.454-06:002011-01-16T11:36:52.454-06:00Jodi : Thanks, and I prefer the SHOW Victor versio...Jodi : Thanks, and I prefer the SHOW Victor version, too. I tried hard to make the TELL entertaining and enlightening in its own right.<br /><br />Victor is full of spunk and attitude, isn't he? And he says he likes you, too, and had to skip away from Alice's kick! LOL.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-55333335329838788222011-01-16T11:34:30.681-06:002011-01-16T11:34:30.681-06:00Frankly,
I enjoy a good tell. In my eyes there in...Frankly,<br /><br />I enjoy a good tell. In my eyes there in nothing wrong with fantastically written tell prose. It is just as informing and entertaining.<br /><br />It is engrained if every new author's mind to SHOW not TELL.<br /><br />WHY? What's wrong with TELLING a story. People have been since the beginning of time.<br /><br />Roland, <br /><br />You know who I feel about your writing. Showing/Telling, it is always worth reading. Never give up.<br /><br />MichaelMichael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-51253663440981802332011-01-16T11:30:14.336-06:002011-01-16T11:30:14.336-06:00You're giveing us reason not to avoid the TELL...You're giveing us reason not to avoid the TELL in our writing, Roland. But, I have to say I do prefer Victor's showing. Way more action, and I love the little guy.<br /><br />JJodi Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216373059861459896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-5311553350448546662011-01-16T08:28:00.754-06:002011-01-16T08:28:00.754-06:00Thanks, Madeleine and Mia. Here's hoping your...Thanks, Madeleine and Mia. Here's hoping your Sundays are healing, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-44812190222813598362011-01-16T02:42:48.225-06:002011-01-16T02:42:48.225-06:00Great piece, really demonstrates the difference be...Great piece, really demonstrates the difference between telling and the previous showing. Great stuff! :O)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-54423807537931269532011-01-15T21:17:45.844-06:002011-01-15T21:17:45.844-06:00Zombies are a primal force, much like the Id given...Zombies are a primal force, much like the Id given form and violence. So of course, Victor Standish was my choice to counter them. And a little child shall slay them! LOL.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-64046978314586093552011-01-15T20:36:12.008-06:002011-01-15T20:36:12.008-06:00Yayyy! You chose the zombie version! Excellent exa...Yayyy! You chose the zombie version! Excellent example of telling, I think it worked well.<br /><br />:DMia Haysonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01041441666482084762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-53025732491143200052011-01-15T19:10:17.596-06:002011-01-15T19:10:17.596-06:00Imagery Imagined : Glad you liked that line that e...Imagery Imagined : Glad you liked that line that explains why his mother, Death, cast him only on the deadly streets -- so that when she appeared to retrieved the dying souls, she would see Victor once more. Yes, that cough is starting to irritate me. One co-worker is already out with it. Guess I will just have to manage somehow. Have a great weekend yourself, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-82266793149163625092011-01-15T18:48:01.086-06:002011-01-15T18:48:01.086-06:00...even though Victor was abandoned, his heart was......even though Victor was abandoned, his heart was always in the right place, with his mother.<br />"She decided to cast him only on the deadliest streets. Then, though he would never again be by her side, he would always be in her heart and in her sight."<br /><br />I enjoyed the post... and take care of the cough. ahem..imagery imaginedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07291852147832887334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-46665038134232254132011-01-15T17:27:40.283-06:002011-01-15T17:27:40.283-06:00Tessa : With the kind of coughing day I'm havi...Tessa : With the kind of coughing day I'm having at work, your words sure made the afternoon a lot better. Thanks for the kind words. I tried to make this TELL lend depth and irony to the narration by Victor. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I certainly needed the emotional boost this solo work day!Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-62714438773799559572011-01-15T17:14:16.621-06:002011-01-15T17:14:16.621-06:00OMG. You know, I do realize that we're suppose...OMG. You know, I do realize that we're supposed to SHOW not TELL but this was JUST AS GOOD as the other version! It gave a lot more information directly to the reader, yes, but it worked in this piece. <br /><br />I guess it's the sign of a good writer to pull off both...you are certainly that!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-80604873185191857162011-01-15T15:46:00.796-06:002011-01-15T15:46:00.796-06:00Donna : Yes, I tried to make the TELL version as e...Donna : Yes, I tried to make the TELL version as entertaining as I could despite telling's inherent weaknesses. And yes, my current # of followers does eerily echo the end of Man motiff.<br /><br />Golden Eagle : Thanks. I tried to make the TELL version noteworthy in and of itself. Glad you think I succeeded.<br /><br />Amos : Yes, exactly. Whichever form is most effective should be the one chosen by us. Thanks for commenting!<br /><br />Misty Waters : I really tried to use the TELL version to lend added depth to Victor's tale. I'm very happy that you really enjoyed it. It made my afternoon at work the better for it.<br /><br />Elliot : Yes, the current # of my followers does lend a macabre aspect to this TELL version. I'm really pleased that you liked my tale.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-30740688622890408862011-01-15T13:37:22.954-06:002011-01-15T13:37:22.954-06:00A vivid telling of the show events. The Elu persp...A vivid telling of the show events. The Elu perspective is just as riveting as Victor's was.<br /><br />Good job. <br /><br />I'm with Elliot on the ghastly number. Whoa . .<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-54627503106271033852011-01-15T12:30:50.574-06:002011-01-15T12:30:50.574-06:00Amazing.
I love the tell version.Amazing.<br /><br />I love the tell version.Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-46962806015187264732011-01-15T12:12:05.689-06:002011-01-15T12:12:05.689-06:00Show vs tell isn't really a big issue for me e...Show vs tell isn't really a big issue for me either way. i do what feels natural at the time.Amos Kepplerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09653402099981546288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-58641507808469334892011-01-15T12:00:16.780-06:002011-01-15T12:00:16.780-06:00Roland. GAH! That was so EFFIN GOOD. You slay me w...Roland. GAH! That was so EFFIN GOOD. You slay me with that and it's simply your TELL version. GAH, I say again. GAH!!Misty Watershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17298645748620886228noreply@blogger.com