tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post3522453272188949098..comments2024-03-28T23:31:06.181-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: RACHEL'S and CALLY'S POWER OF TENSION BLOGFEST_THEATER OF BLOOD/LESSON OF PAINRoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger38125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-80941692181412685422011-06-01T01:03:08.579-05:002011-06-01T01:03:08.579-05:00Susanna :
Very perceptive. Victor always has a pla...Susanna :<br />Very perceptive. Victor always has a plan. Sometimes they even work!! But Victor never gives up. Thanks for liking my post. I hope the bear leaves you alone tonight. If I had your email address, I'd send you my fable, THE BEAR WITH TWO SHADOWS (sort of a Native American Lord of the Rings)<br /><br />Stickynotestories :<br />Yes, Victor makes it out with one broken thumb, a raw wrist, and laughter as he surprises Strasser with a little lesson of his own! Of course, there are the other vampires in the front row. But that will have to wait until I can find a publisher for THE LEGEND OF VICTOR STANDISH ...Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-80215288916334369862011-05-31T14:33:33.124-05:002011-05-31T14:33:33.124-05:00Very interesting scene - I have a feeling that our...Very interesting scene - I have a feeling that our friend will make it out alive, but only just!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-43496677736723900322011-05-31T12:19:30.861-05:002011-05-31T12:19:30.861-05:00This is a great entry! The tension is terrific, a...This is a great entry! The tension is terrific, and i love that Victor manages to hold onto his courage in the face of such danger. His smart-alecness makes him very likeable. If I were Stasser, I'd watch out. I'm guessing Victor has something up his sleeve!Susanna Leonard Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-82441418004855442172011-05-29T19:34:26.211-05:002011-05-29T19:34:26.211-05:00Thanks, Crystal :
Victor has decided never to bow....Thanks, Crystal :<br />Victor has decided never to bow. He bears the scars of that decision, but he has never lost his self-respect. And it has made him a legend in the realms of darkness. Have a great Sunday and Monday, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-76260010381714568472011-05-29T19:29:17.793-05:002011-05-29T19:29:17.793-05:00Nice! I love Victor's attitude - stick it to &...Nice! I love Victor's attitude - stick it to 'em!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-69884538519165527312011-05-29T15:30:53.932-05:002011-05-29T15:30:53.932-05:00Rachel :
Victor isn't called the "Ulysses...Rachel :<br />Victor isn't called the "Ulysses of the French Quarter" for nothing. He always has a plan.<br /><br />I had fun entering. Like Victor, I run the race for the thrill of it, not the thought of winning. Have a fun Sunday and Memorial Day. Me? As a harried, weary rare blood courier, I will be working, of course. LOL. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-19855857499886298922011-05-29T07:43:37.663-05:002011-05-29T07:43:37.663-05:00Oh dear, this doesn’t look good for Victor... I do...Oh dear, this doesn’t look good for Victor... I do like his spirit though! Won’t go down without a fight!<br /><br />Thanks for entering, Roland :-)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06181241692016438730noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-29957622758499755552011-05-28T19:58:51.310-05:002011-05-28T19:58:51.310-05:00Botonist :
Victor's cheeks paid the price for ...Botonist :<br />Victor's cheeks paid the price for his "cheekiness." But it was a price Victor is always willing to pay not to lose respect for himself! I'm glad you liked it, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-26053471165329995892011-05-28T18:41:33.149-05:002011-05-28T18:41:33.149-05:00I like this! Clear and immediate danger, but the M...I like this! Clear and immediate danger, but the MC has the fire to answer back. Nice!Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-36647229077137288112011-05-27T11:00:16.573-05:002011-05-27T11:00:16.573-05:00Thanks, Ellie :
Delicious dark and creepy is poor ...Thanks, Ellie :<br />Delicious dark and creepy is poor Victor's life -- hence the ghoul friend he makes. LOL.<br /><br />Damyanti :<br />I'm glad you think this book would be a kicker -- now, if only I can convince an agent of that!! RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-48831494782513222702011-05-27T10:11:21.386-05:002011-05-27T10:11:21.386-05:00Love how the conflict between the two keeps up the...Love how the conflict between the two keeps up the tension high jinks!<br /><br />This book would be a kicker :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04283371140346602856noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-2848072079566441192011-05-27T03:50:13.098-05:002011-05-27T03:50:13.098-05:00Ooo...the tension is sizzling. Deliciously dark an...Ooo...the tension is sizzling. Deliciously dark and creepy. Loved it!<br /><br /><a href="http://elliegarratt.blogspot.com/2011/05/power-of-tension-blogfest-cosmic-seed.html" rel="nofollow">Power Of Tension Blogfest</a>Ellie Garratthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03731071128348213067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-48401561719679862752011-05-26T23:45:53.385-05:002011-05-26T23:45:53.385-05:00Sari :
Glad you liked my take on being threatened ...Sari :<br />Glad you liked my take on being threatened by a vampire -- not for food but for a school lesson!<br /><br />Lady Gwen :<br />You can find out what happened next in my post hosted by Mark Twain :<br />http://rolandyeomans.blogspot.com/2010/09/back-to-school-blogfesttheatre-of.html<br />Hope you like it.<br /><br />Gabrielle :<br />Glad you enjoyed Victor's humor. I'll have to study some on how to make Strasser's action sound more natural (for the undead, that is!)<br /><br />Small Town Shelly Brown :<br />You hit the nail on the head for Victor. If he feels he is going to die, he will thumb his nose all the way at his enemies.<br /><br />Kitty :<br />Wendy's trailer for you is fantastic and precious. I see why you are so pleased with it.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-66209343513179595042011-05-26T20:14:05.413-05:002011-05-26T20:14:05.413-05:00Great job, Roland. Loved it, especially the quick...Great job, Roland. Loved it, especially the quick pacing. Thought I detected a bit of Casablanca in the Major. Great job!<br /><br />And thanks to a button you had on your blog for Wendy, I asked her to do the trailer for my chapbook. I'm sooooo happy with what she produced. Google YouTube and type in Remy Broussard's Christmas for a sneak preview.Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-49780179662472507662011-05-26T13:33:54.235-05:002011-05-26T13:33:54.235-05:00I liked "What about dirt bag" and "...I liked "What about dirt bag" and "I could take a hint. I shut up."<br />You know if your gonna die might as well go smiling.<br />Great entry.Small Town Shelly Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13535247595352753415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-78315226290584149862011-05-26T13:03:51.435-05:002011-05-26T13:03:51.435-05:00I really liked this! The style itself is very tens...I really liked this! The style itself is very tense and energetic, and I loved the sharp wit from the MC. The only thing I would suggest changing is the way you wrote out Major Strasser's action. It felt kind of awkward because it was very "He did this, he did that." Otherwise, fabulous!Gabriellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13470563164338664147noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-90384908244089577042011-05-26T12:43:11.145-05:002011-05-26T12:43:11.145-05:00Scary...and then what happened? *bites her nails*Scary...and then what happened? *bites her nails*Gwen Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13132836346305559246noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-37868806941698774072011-05-26T03:22:02.352-05:002011-05-26T03:22:02.352-05:00Cool twist on a vampire story! Great entry, Roland...Cool twist on a vampire story! Great entry, Roland.Sari Webbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14157780034728554529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-67226519610599072642011-05-26T01:09:57.804-05:002011-05-26T01:09:57.804-05:00Thanks, Carol :
And I hope your writing is going w...Thanks, Carol :<br />And I hope your writing is going well, too. Yes, Victor gets loose, but it costs him a broken thumb. It costs Strasser a bit more. Victor is like that! LOL.<br /><br />LOL, Sharon :<br />This is one of the few times that Victor has been accused of being passive. :) Truly, thanks for the ways to improve my prose.<br /><br />Michael :<br />Like you, I don't think Victor will ever learn to keep his mouth shut ... at least not for long! Thanks for liking my excerpt, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-64145600877573012242011-05-25T18:09:42.637-05:002011-05-25T18:09:42.637-05:00Will Victor ever learn to keep his mouth shut? Not...Will Victor ever learn to keep his mouth shut? Not likely .... Thank God.<br /><br />He is a true soul! Terrific excerpt Roland.Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-79691249244857197632011-05-25T17:43:02.788-05:002011-05-25T17:43:02.788-05:00Swaying to the beat of her heart is so creepy. Th...Swaying to the beat of her heart is so creepy. There were a few passive parts, like the second "I was hanging" and the sentence starting with "seeing the man..." but overall, very good. Good luck!Sharon Baylisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17361550815860670756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-46736032115005199022011-05-25T15:29:54.088-05:002011-05-25T15:29:54.088-05:00Wow, definite tension. Freaky! I do hope he gets l...Wow, definite tension. Freaky! I do hope he gets loose. He seems clever enough to do so. ;o) Hope your writing is going well, Roland!Carol Riggshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14092209912983783974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-1539509727161019872011-05-24T21:23:36.186-05:002011-05-24T21:23:36.186-05:00Thanks, Crystal :
I tried to comment on your entry...Thanks, Crystal :<br />I tried to comment on your entry, but Blogger will not let me sign in. I think Blogger hates me. I don't hear of anyone else having this trouble. Sigh. Have a great mid-week, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-42082478599345059202011-05-24T20:38:21.250-05:002011-05-24T20:38:21.250-05:00Great combination. Very interesting.Great combination. Very interesting.Crystal Collierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03912469552483168148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-70409593348922742162011-05-24T18:28:04.580-05:002011-05-24T18:28:04.580-05:00Raquel :
I thought that bit made Victor feel as if...Raquel :<br />I thought that bit made Victor feel as if his own body was betraying him. Thanks for liking it.<br /><br />Libby :<br />Victor stays sane in his insane world by his humor. I'm glad you enjoyed his humorous dig at himself.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.com