tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post3749863323896968376..comments2024-03-25T05:17:05.202-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: I AM SO HUNGRY_MY ENTRY FOR THE BLOGFEST RETOLDRoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-13929274338957062432010-11-16T21:11:22.844-06:002010-11-16T21:11:22.844-06:00Good luck!! Oooh! Very exciting! Let us know how i...Good luck!! Oooh! Very exciting! Let us know how it turns out!Just Another Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07589166715361819941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-25852099159905226212010-11-16T19:57:46.152-06:002010-11-16T19:57:46.152-06:00GOOD LUCK ROLAND *jumps up and down, does happy da...GOOD LUCK ROLAND *jumps up and down, does happy dance, drinks a toast to your prospective success*<br /><br />.........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-74337326654326381162010-11-16T18:36:46.148-06:002010-11-16T18:36:46.148-06:00Dark, macabre with a vein of hope - just my cup of...Dark, macabre with a vein of hope - just my cup of tea. I, too, enjoyed the dual POVs, as well as the last line. Superb job, Roland.VR Barkowskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04927993233682731113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-13173545704668632622010-11-16T11:38:13.646-06:002010-11-16T11:38:13.646-06:00Excellent penning, Roland. I too liked the duo POV...Excellent penning, Roland. I too liked the duo POV's and this paragraph captured me: <em>I was not going to cry. I wasn't. I looked up at the dim stars. They blurred and bled down my cheeks. O.K. I lied. I was crying.</em> Victor is definitely closing a chapter in his life!<br />Well done.EChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09359075647077590741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-3134253121171349252010-11-16T11:16:47.538-06:002010-11-16T11:16:47.538-06:00Amalia : The moment she referred to herself cautio...Amalia : The moment she referred to herself cautiously as 'Alice,' she decided to give rein to her lonely heart not her empty stomach. The world is full of bad people but only one Victor Standish.<br /><br />Francine : Alice's existence will be hollow no longer -- dangerous, thrilling, and somtimes funny, sometimes tragic -- but never hollow again.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-74524703911857090562010-11-16T09:41:07.662-06:002010-11-16T09:41:07.662-06:00Hi,
Fab first-person POV, and the prose as always...Hi,<br /><br />Fab first-person POV, and the prose as always exceptional in presentation: the hollow existance of Alice' fate touching despite macabre in every sense of the word, macabre! <br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-33366634170841943472010-11-16T09:36:20.238-06:002010-11-16T09:36:20.238-06:00I'm curious now if she sticks to her guns and ...I'm curious now if she sticks to her guns and rends him later, or if she actually lets a little love creep in! Well done, Roland, very interesting!Amalia Dillinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13005039978668326144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-85956675211714991842010-11-16T09:24:14.467-06:002010-11-16T09:24:14.467-06:00Thanks, Michael.Thanks, Michael.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-54630457024106209262010-11-16T09:08:17.387-06:002010-11-16T09:08:17.387-06:00I absolutely wish you LUCK! Just remember you don&...I absolutely wish you LUCK! Just remember you don't need luck, really, you have something much more ... T A L E N T !<br /><br />MichaelMichael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-20803780100094268422010-11-16T08:46:46.471-06:002010-11-16T08:46:46.471-06:00Lady Boheme : You made me blush there. Thanks. And...Lady Boheme : You made me blush there. Thanks. And I look forward to your comments. Sorry I've had one of those 300 miles days last night.<br /><br />Donna : Yes, I like that phrase, too. An agent has asked to see the first 50 pages of THE LEGEND OF VICTOR STANDISH. I'm just about to send it. Wish me luck.<br /><br />Wendy : It worked out better than I hoped. Thanks for liking the pairing as much as I liked writing it.<br /><br />Sarah : Glad to join in your fun. Wish me luck with those 50 pages, will you?<br /><br />Michael : I think teenagers like the macabre. I guess inside I still am one. Nothing from the partial yet. And wish me more luck with the first 50 pages I'm sending out on THE LEGEND OF VICTOR STANDISH.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-28317150029278284492010-11-16T03:35:13.095-06:002010-11-16T03:35:13.095-06:00Roland...you are so friggin talented. I don't...Roland...you are so friggin talented. I don't know if I could ever reiterate that enough. I always look forward to your entries.Lovy Bohemehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13509964193558798499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-36462748988253508412010-11-16T02:29:29.571-06:002010-11-16T02:29:29.571-06:00I liked the dual POV's. Very interesting.
So...I liked the dual POV's. Very interesting.<br /><br />Something about that phrase "ghoul friend" has always engaged me when reading these two.<br /><br />So very creepy Roland. Just the way I like it.<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-6414046453442091062010-11-15T23:58:45.736-06:002010-11-15T23:58:45.736-06:00"...tears bleed from my dead eyes". Awe..."...tears bleed from my dead eyes". Awesome image. Loved your entry. Loved how the two fit nicely into one another.Wendy Tyler Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10841984342368861282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-44573695422483073802010-11-15T23:46:53.765-06:002010-11-15T23:46:53.765-06:00Oh, geez! That was so creepy! And, of course, well...Oh, geez! That was so creepy! And, of course, well-written. I like how you showed us Alice--and the following scene! The two fit so well together.<br /><br />"I sniff. A male human. A boy. I stiffen. Once I had been a girl. What had been my name?<br /><br />Alice. Though now my name is Death, once it had been Alice." yikes! But awesome--thanks for sharing! :)Just Another Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07589166715361819941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-16945831723971526192010-11-15T23:17:19.006-06:002010-11-15T23:17:19.006-06:00OH Great! I'm the first to comment. OOOOOOOOO,...OH Great! I'm the first to comment. OOOOOOOOO, I feel exactly like Victor Standish. I'd always have shivers, too!<br /><br />The beginning unnerved me. I see you have a gift for the macabre, too! Great description and oh so C O L D ... You wove a tale of fiendish delight. <br /><br />Any news on the partial? We are all rooting for you!<br /><br />MichaelMichael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.com