tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post4587218027535589791..comments2024-03-25T05:17:05.202-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: BAD BOY BLOGFEST/AMONG THE BONES YOU FIND ON THE BEACH, THE ONES THAT SING WERE MINERoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-84064062735465411562010-06-22T13:41:19.783-05:002010-06-22T13:41:19.783-05:00Sorry I couldn't visit any time sooner, I'...Sorry I couldn't visit any time sooner, I've been out of town for Father's day, just catching up now!<br /><br />I still enjoy your writing, Roland, so vivid and rich with details. Thanks for sharing!<br /><br />I haven't seen you on my <a href="http://elizabethmueller.blogspot.com/2010/06/bad-boy-blogfest-and-winner.html" rel="nofollow">bad boy</a>! Please drop by and read! I'd love to hear your thoughts!Elizabeth Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06028099814857743134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-43518080582600150082010-06-21T03:54:33.991-05:002010-06-21T03:54:33.991-05:00Great piece - I'm quite intrigued by Daystar a...Great piece - I'm quite intrigued by Daystar and Sam, and love your phrasing and descriptions. I got quite caught up in it.<br /><br />"...his children of endless hunger." Yes, love this.<br /><br />BTW, thanks for commenting earlier on my blog to remind me of this blogfest. I was so tied up w/ family this weekend I'd forgotten about it. But thanks to you, I now have my 'bad boy' contribution posted!roh morgonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06823641709307631626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-79817925387380268462010-06-21T00:22:19.178-05:002010-06-21T00:22:19.178-05:00Very naughty to end on a hook like that, Roland! O...Very naughty to end on a hook like that, Roland! Other than that, great excerpt! :) Most compelling was your beautiful and subtle description of Daystar. He's so perfect, he must be evil because none of us is without flaw. You do realize your ability to create mood is extraordinary? <br /><br />My favorite line this time (although it was hard to chose only one): "My mind has slippery fingers."VR Barkowskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04927993233682731113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-8948545096265461502010-06-20T17:37:03.603-05:002010-06-20T17:37:03.603-05:00Roland you had me hooked from the first passage -&...Roland you had me hooked from the first passage -'He wore gloom like some kings wore purple.' I am a sucker for great description and you have it in spades. Thanks for sharing..:) Your story rocks!Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-61656270506574535412010-06-20T16:54:04.252-05:002010-06-20T16:54:04.252-05:00You had me hooked at "He wore gloom like some...You had me hooked at "He wore gloom like some kings wore purple." Great writing, you know how to weave a story. I would love to read the rest too. Daystar is a very bad boy indeed.Taleihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07317577935549931974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-90187269776994327312010-06-20T15:40:39.692-05:002010-06-20T15:40:39.692-05:00You write powerful stuff, you really do. Bad boys ...You write powerful stuff, you really do. Bad boys galore! <br /><br /> "I don't do party favours" - Classic. That line is classic. <br /><br />Great stuff!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-4258480154444833452010-06-20T11:14:00.314-05:002010-06-20T11:14:00.314-05:00Not sure what's going on here, but there's...Not sure what's going on here, but there's a lot of it. :)<br />It's a bad-guy stand-off. Nice. <br />:)Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-78283083865589668542010-06-20T11:10:36.382-05:002010-06-20T11:10:36.382-05:00Wow! That was intense. I was so caught up in the...Wow! That was intense. I was so caught up in the story I forgot I was reading in a blog-fest -- and then the story was cut off. :(<br />There is a veracity to the world you created that gets immediate reader buy in, and that was made clear is this scene alone. I would love to read the rest.Erin Kane Spockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05376851676240606472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-59448713007607193392010-06-20T10:07:37.081-05:002010-06-20T10:07:37.081-05:00What an intriguing world you've built here. Be...What an intriguing world you've built here. Being completely new to it, my interest is piqued. <br /><br />One thought: it's hard to tell who is speaking when after a few lines. Tags are evil, but necessary.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-87807641542739377502010-06-20T03:27:47.823-05:002010-06-20T03:27:47.823-05:00The imagery in this was so amazing. Wonderful!
&l...The imagery in this was so amazing. Wonderful!<br /><br /><3 Kelsey LeighKris n' Kelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15273239971556065096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-6370930908981616962010-06-20T02:53:28.447-05:002010-06-20T02:53:28.447-05:00Awesome! I have to say my favorite line was "...Awesome! I have to say my favorite line was "A rich voice, like the tolling of bronze bells far off in the distance..." Such vivid description. Now I have to buy it:) Thanks for participating!Tina Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05914428134837892539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-50813900406403813542010-06-20T01:38:53.658-05:002010-06-20T01:38:53.658-05:00Oooh! You tease...not a cliff-hanger! I love your ...Oooh! You tease...not a cliff-hanger! I love your similes and descriptions.<br /><br />"He wore gloom like some kings wore purple." The voice like brass bells, and froth of curls...very unique and artful.<br /><br />Great entry!Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-90889099931838101262010-06-20T00:49:16.571-05:002010-06-20T00:49:16.571-05:00Hey, I have no problem with you switching it to th...Hey, I have no problem with you switching it to the fantasy one! I didn't know what people had so....<br /><br />I only found out about the bad boy blogfest the other day and I didn't have time to pick a piece to enter. I never find out about these blog fests until they are upon us. I have some pretty bad ass characters too... Oh sigh. <br /><br />Maybe one day I'll join a blog fest! In the mean time I'll get my kicks reading your awesome stuff!Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12096764010151024050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-82069889415145783922010-06-19T23:42:14.470-05:002010-06-19T23:42:14.470-05:00very interesting character! And definitely a bad b...very interesting character! And definitely a bad boy. I feel a little bit better about my own entry now, reading yours, since we both went the same direction for the "bad" aspect of this fest--toward the villain. :)Amalia Dillinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13005039978668326144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-27813713219336061022010-06-19T19:10:18.615-05:002010-06-19T19:10:18.615-05:00Thanks for your wise words on my blog!
I love how ...Thanks for your wise words on my blog!<br />I love how this ends. Choice as a delusion to all mortals. Fantastic thought. I love the tension of all the power bubbling under all of the words spoken by Daystar. <br />Great passage!Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-41644937121643723172010-06-19T18:53:31.541-05:002010-06-19T18:53:31.541-05:00Awesome. I have a suggestion for you: Just start...Awesome. I have a suggestion for you: Just start from the beginning of Nocturn, and give us a daily chapter. Who with me to be here every day to read the novels?<br /><br />You're too cool Roland. I'm glad to see DayStar is a separate entity than Sam. From previous posts, I had wondered if Day Star and Gray Man were another of Sam's many names. I like this evil character!<br /><br />I should have saved that writing prompt a few days ago for this blog fest. How am I supposed to come up with something as good as this.<br /><br />Dern you.<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-5745398070739572632010-06-19T17:10:55.357-05:002010-06-19T17:10:55.357-05:00Dude....Samuel just keeps getting better! I'm ...Dude....Samuel just keeps getting better! I'm amazed at his sheer awesomeness and how you have so many different aspects all working together in this snippet. Truly talented you are. <br /><br />Hope you get a break from the courier job soon!Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12096764010151024050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-10597007078658356832010-06-19T16:50:14.333-05:002010-06-19T16:50:14.333-05:00More DayStar, yay! Interesting name for an evil be...More DayStar, yay! Interesting name for an evil being. I like Samuel more and more each time I read about him and I get the feeling he's about to kick some DayStar/undead tail. Great bad boys!<br /><br />~OliviaOlivia J. Herrell, writing as O.J. Barréhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01107021392937169669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-42451971189842080032010-06-19T12:15:15.645-05:002010-06-19T12:15:15.645-05:00Kitty : Glad you liked my entry. If only I can int...Kitty : Glad you liked my entry. If only I can interest an agent, perhaps RITES OF PASSAGE can find a publishing home.<br /><br />Becky : If I knew the doors to pound on, I'd be pounding on them right alongside you! As Sam might tell me, "Son, anyone can quit. Not everyone can keep going til the job gets done." You and I will just have to keep going until the job gets done. The picture is one of the oldest ones in my photo archive, meaning I no longer know where it came from. Sorry. <br /><br />Kitty and Becky : you both made a weary morning after driving 350 miles and working 15 hours straight a happier one. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-36910033063532387702010-06-19T11:51:20.132-05:002010-06-19T11:51:20.132-05:00*deep, soulful sigh....* I'm devastated. And s...*deep, soulful sigh....* I'm devastated. And shocked. What door can I go pound on? Who can I wake with phone calls till I get an answer? From whom does a little blood need to spill? ...and where did you get that awesome picture?The Words Crafterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14520267901489487512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-79336039380840133852010-06-19T06:05:25.680-05:002010-06-19T06:05:25.680-05:00Where can I buy it!?!!!!!! I'm totally hooked!...Where can I buy it!?!!!!!! I'm totally hooked!The Words Crafterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14520267901489487512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-77038119985047217612010-06-19T05:39:57.710-05:002010-06-19T05:39:57.710-05:00Oooh two badboys - one of them the hero!
A lovely...Oooh two badboys - one of them the hero!<br /><br />A lovely piece dripping in blood, gore, sensuality and darkness. I enjoyed this immensely - it was like The Apple that Eve should not have bitten but did because it was so damned red and tempting and yummy and juicy! I look forward to reading the rest in your novel!<br /><br />Thank you for sharing.<br />Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.com