tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post6956486294151031663..comments2024-03-29T03:28:22.296-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: DREAM SEQUENCE BLOGFEST : THERE IS NO GOODBYERoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-4573239026989684812010-06-05T17:34:31.081-05:002010-06-05T17:34:31.081-05:00Thanks for putting up my blogfest o'death butt...Thanks for putting up my blogfest o'death button!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-63131908681825882882010-06-05T17:16:31.727-05:002010-06-05T17:16:31.727-05:00Amalia : Thank you for giving such a fun blogfest....Amalia : Thank you for giving such a fun blogfest. I've always been a fan of King Arthur mythology. The third novel I had planned for the young girl centered on Blake's adventures in an Avalon he never expected.<br /><br />Tessa : If only you were a publisher! But then you could publish yourself, too. If I ever win a lotto, I might just buy a small publishing house. Yes, Blake can be a bit snarky. It's his way of coping with being overwhelmed and outnumbered. Glad it made you smile.<br /><br />Eric : I think I know you. You would have written the novels for her as well. We're both knight-errants at heart. Thanks.<br /><br />Elaizabeth : Sorry for the confusion. Blake's body is in present-day Wellington, New Zealand (the girl's dream was to visit New Zealand - I'm afraid I infected her with it) -- Blake's spirit was snatched by the High Faerie Queen to the Arthur's barge sailing along the Time Stream. It's hard to snatch an episode out of the middle of a novel without plot threads dangling from it!<br /><br />Hayley : Your perception was dead-on (pun intended.) Blake's situation is bittersweet. He cannot stay alive if he wants the fae of his dreams to live.<br /><br />Amber : Thanks for liking my dream scene. The myths of King Arthur are fun to play with.<br /><br />E J : Thanks for noting the difference between the courtly speech of the Faerie Queens compared to the modern wisecracks of a young orphan, trying not to buckle under the stress.<br /><br />Kristie : Yes, the queens stayed with me as well. Literally, I used them in two other YA fantasies I've since written : LOVE LIKE DEATH and LAST EXIT TO BABYLON.<br /><br />Thanks to everyone who commented or who just read. I am working this weekend and on first call on top of that. I am weary! Laughter. I stay weary it seems. Thanks again, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-49159560285512290912010-06-05T17:01:06.009-05:002010-06-05T17:01:06.009-05:00Sarah jayne : I had an audience of one in mind and...Sarah jayne : I had an audience of one in mind and wanted her to be able to roll lyrical phrases in her mind during the dark times at the hospital. Thanks for thinking I pulled it off.<br /><br />Courtney : That you think the time you spend here well spent is quite a compliment. Your blog is lovely as well.<br /><br />Charity : When Blake meets his end, he discovers how it is his beginning. A clue is in the title of the 2nd book : NEVER QUITE THE END. Yes, Blake is a bit of a wise-mouth, his way of dealing with bullies. Glad you liked his wit.<br /><br />Sangu : Yes, I was writing on the run so my pacing could use some work.<br /><br />Raquel : You're just like the young girl. She giggled at all of Blake's wise cracks. Like her, you are intelligent and fun-loving.<br /><br />Laughing Wolf : From your lips to God's ear. Maybe one day I will approach the right agent.<br /><br />Andrew : Aren't all of us just a little crazy?<br /><br />Sharon : I plead writing while weary. But I should have tightened it up before posting here. Thanks for liking it despite its flaws.<br /><br />Lydia : I'll try. And how do you cram 26 hours into the day?<br /><br />Elaine : Your praise is much appreciated. Yes, life is never what we expect. Why should we hold out that death will be any different?<br /><br />Catwoods : Come back again. As a weary blood courier, I try to visit as many of my friends as I can, but my eyes eventually give out.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-65223686206556055732010-06-05T11:29:12.932-05:002010-06-05T11:29:12.932-05:00Fantastic, Roland! The queens enthralled me. Excel...Fantastic, Roland! The queens enthralled me. Excellent description of them. The story sounds very interesting. I hope the girl at least got to learn the end. What a nice gift you gave her.Kristie Cookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01649966564896771373noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-91093408251702776402010-06-05T09:26:00.794-05:002010-06-05T09:26:00.794-05:00I agree with what Amalia T said about the imagery,...I agree with what Amalia T said about the imagery, especially regarding the fairy queens hair. Your MC's voice seems almost contemporary compared with the fairies language and I like that...it lends to how ancient they are. Great dialogue and descriptions.EJ Fechendahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05300369395930503020noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-83219839885652763542010-06-05T00:01:23.947-05:002010-06-05T00:01:23.947-05:00I don't know much about the mythology connecti...I don't know much about the mythology connecting King Arthur and Faires but it is interesting and I loved your scene.Amber Lynaehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16890268873178010212noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-73155878027686870762010-06-04T22:22:38.875-05:002010-06-04T22:22:38.875-05:00The time frame was the only thing that confused me...The time frame was the only thing that confused me other than that I adored this post, it was bittersweet (I think) and just*sigh* beautiful. Nicely done!Hayley Lovellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16786674202167099600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-79053611762905455122010-06-04T20:07:26.150-05:002010-06-04T20:07:26.150-05:00Roland, you are such a sweety for writing this for...Roland, you are such a sweety for writing this for the angel. My heart mourns for her loss, but she is glorious in heaven!<br /><br />I enjoyed your passage, but I am confused as to the time frame of your work? Is it a modern man trapped int Myrlin's time? If so, you succeeded in your words like Algebra, charley horse, etc...<br /><br />;)<br /><br />I loved this description: "Her voice took on an edge you could cut diamonds"Elizabeth Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06028099814857743134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-4623322781095268162010-06-04T18:32:28.286-05:002010-06-04T18:32:28.286-05:00Sad about the little girl. More than the story its...Sad about the little girl. More than the story itself, I like the reason behind writing it.<br /><br />Says a lot about Roland.<br /><br /> - EricEric W. Tranthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13842968931062056407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-39802440670607621102010-06-04T17:06:24.237-05:002010-06-04T17:06:24.237-05:00Wow. If I were a publisher I'd want rights. Yo...Wow. If I were a publisher I'd want rights. You're really good at writing stories with knowledge added in, without anyone realizing it. I love how the fairy called Arthur 'Wart' - how many american children still learn about the story of arthur and how he became king? And I'm not talking disney! I particularly loved these lines: <br /><br />"Guess I couldn't even die right" <br /><br />and the slightly snarky "It makes my eyes water"<br /><br />GREAT.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-11951583161765148752010-06-04T17:01:05.512-05:002010-06-04T17:01:05.512-05:00I really liked the description of the one faerie Q...I really liked the description of the one faerie Queen's hair as moonlight. As always, you have great imagery! I'm really curious about this book too-- The Mythology surrounding King Arthur is one area where I haven't done much research, though it's a favorite of my husband's. Nicely done!<br />And thanks for participating!Amalia Dillinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13005039978668326144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-77410110782279890122010-06-04T14:42:55.670-05:002010-06-04T14:42:55.670-05:00I have to ditto the sentiment on not being able to...I have to ditto the sentiment on not being able to die right. That's where I got sucked in. I enjoyed the lyrical quality to your writing and the subtle humor found within. <br /><br />Like you, I hope you're published before things straighten out at the university. This seems like something I would love to read to the end. <br /><br />Thanks for inviting me over to check it out.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-22845781804954937812010-06-04T13:10:13.853-05:002010-06-04T13:10:13.853-05:00Everyone like the same sections! The idea that eve...Everyone like the same sections! The idea that even dying properly eluded him - it told me such a lot about how your Knight sees himself.<br />And the idea that he is in for a world of pain.<br />Ah, dear! Life and death are never easy.<br />Well done Roland.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-83355111995030006382010-06-04T12:52:13.051-05:002010-06-04T12:52:13.051-05:00I just loved that line--"I guess I couldn'...I just loved that line--"I guess I couldn't even die right." It was so great!<br />A great excerpt. Keep them coming if you can!Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-87973023868248838902010-06-04T11:42:53.807-05:002010-06-04T11:42:53.807-05:00Once again, your blogfest contribution shines like...Once again, your blogfest contribution shines like gold. The banter was delicious, the mood exquisite. I agree there are a couple of places to tighten up--I skated over--but very few, and the rest of the writing was pure joy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-85851636567226451472010-06-04T11:42:41.692-05:002010-06-04T11:42:41.692-05:00My head was spinning
That's how I felt readin...<i>My head was spinning</i><br /><br />That's how I felt reading all this.<br /><br /><i>And maybe I was going a little bit crazy</i><br /><br />Yes!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-11752132904489725942010-06-04T11:40:57.746-05:002010-06-04T11:40:57.746-05:00i'm still confused why agents have not beat ea...i'm still confused why agents have not beat each other up to represent you... your tales are exemplarylaughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-70238933667206031402010-06-04T11:15:24.757-05:002010-06-04T11:15:24.757-05:00Your scene it very vivid, but i like the dialouge ...Your scene it very vivid, but i like the dialouge the best. The dead-but-not-quite-dead line made me smile. Loved the voice of your character.<br /><br />Great post.Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-22044586653618069212010-06-04T11:06:33.706-05:002010-06-04T11:06:33.706-05:00Love the banter here, it flowed very well! There w...Love the banter here, it flowed very well! There were a couple of places where I found myself kind of skimming the text, so maybe the pace needs a little tightening up. The tone and mood was excellent!Sangu Mandannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09464061265952789628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-22972162070759331282010-06-04T10:15:36.223-05:002010-06-04T10:15:36.223-05:00:) Nice! I enjoyed the flow and the light hearted ...:) Nice! I enjoyed the flow and the light hearted banter during such a serious conversation. It kept it from bogging me down. <br /><br />There were moments I was confused, but I'm definitely NOT professor material. I like things simply. But, having said that, I was interested enough to read to the end. So great job! <br /><br />I'm curious as to how and if he still meets an early death.Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-18133269827701436122010-06-04T08:54:55.861-05:002010-06-04T08:54:55.861-05:00As always you swept me away! I love your writing R...As always you swept me away! I love your writing Roland and every time I sneak over here I am pleased with the time spent. <br /><br />thank you for the wonderful entry!<br /><br /><a href="http://princesscourtneysbarr.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">Visit My Kingdom Anytime</a>Courtney Barr - The Southern Princesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14455508477182984039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-88170931389991440392010-06-04T08:01:22.048-05:002010-06-04T08:01:22.048-05:00Like all of your work that I've read, this is ...Like all of your work that I've read, this is lovely, almost lyrical and lilting. I especially loved these two lines:<br /><br /><em>Guess I couldn't even die right. Did that make me dead?</em><br /><br />They just seem to add so much to pull me into the piece.sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-87485210803240840762010-06-04T02:31:17.073-05:002010-06-04T02:31:17.073-05:00Thanks, Donna. My best friend, Sandra, said I had ...Thanks, Donna. My best friend, Sandra, said I had the qualifications to be a university professor here at the local university if it were not for all the office politics and nepotism. I think I would enjoy teaching college students.<br /><br />Wait a few years Sandra tells me. Things are on the verge of straightening out at our university. Let's hope. Me, I'm hoping to be published by then. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-45066054432396030622010-06-04T02:12:19.986-05:002010-06-04T02:12:19.986-05:00And why are you not a college professor Roland?
I...And why are you not a college professor Roland?<br /><br />I've noted that all your writings have an air of instruction about them. Your novel scenes include lessons in mythology, eitquette and morality. (No, that's not a complaint, merely and observation.)<br /><br />I read through your last few posts also, as I cannot get here as often as you submit your writings. Sorry about that. <br /><br />Your excerpts are always fascinating; I learn so much about about ancient world and its history. This was a very interesting piece. I enjoyed the Knight's sense of humor and his straight-forward insights. You are masterful at eloquent prose.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing your dream sequence.<br /><br />......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.com