tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post1851654213258282515..comments2024-03-25T05:17:05.202-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: HAUNTED BY WHISPERS_Friday's Romantic ChallengeRoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-54461301355583241982012-09-23T19:22:16.002-05:002012-09-23T19:22:16.002-05:00I enjoyed this one! Love the little quip at the en...I enjoyed this one! Love the little quip at the end :)Charmaine Clancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18059559142070140041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-8649947387185018732012-09-23T17:09:27.796-05:002012-09-23T17:09:27.796-05:00Dear Roland,
I love the opening:'I was haunte...Dear Roland,<br /><br />I love the opening:'I was haunted by whispers. Did you know memories have voices? They do.'<br />Memories can really be that vivid.<br /><br />And then I also like this line: 'I've been called a "no-one" all my life, Princess. Let's be lonely together.'<br /><br />I can't wait to read what you post for Halloween! I hope you will post for Birthday Madness too.<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><a href="http://annas-adornments.blogspot.se/2012/09/how-i-hate-my-beautiful-friend-rfw.html" rel="nofollow">RFW No. 45 - 'Oh how I hate my beautiful friend'</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-91702345834987858132012-09-22T22:25:05.214-05:002012-09-22T22:25:05.214-05:00Heather Murphy:
If you read her traumatic 7th year...Heather Murphy:<br />If you read her traumatic 7th year in the beginning of THE RIVAL, you will understand why she is the way she is. Think THE WAlKING DEAD.<br /><br />Michael:<br />I believe this Christmas will be your season! Thanks for the kind words.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-87225553348137507342012-09-22T21:45:58.834-05:002012-09-22T21:45:58.834-05:00Hi, Roland,
Some FANTABULOUS imagery here. Like D...Hi, Roland,<br /><br />Some FANTABULOUS imagery here. Like Donna said I loved, "My skin almost jumped off my skeleton."<br /><br />I always enjoy these visual treats from your novels....Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-2219888567165389182012-09-22T14:23:10.649-05:002012-09-22T14:23:10.649-05:00Becca is a self-centered little thing, isn't s...Becca is a self-centered little thing, isn't she? No wonder she's lonelyHeather Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11847855601653718033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-48713675534884971682012-09-22T00:33:47.922-05:002012-09-22T00:33:47.922-05:00Denise:
Becca felt deserted by Trish, her friend o...Denise:<br />Becca felt deserted by Trish, her friend of seven years, when Trish seemingly forgot all about Becca with her crush on Toomey Starks. Maxine just got on her bad side by trying to be understanding. But, yes, they do form an alliance.<br /><br />Bette Midler's song here is one of my favorites. I'm happy Hemingway gave you a bit of enjoyment, too. :-)Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-53915888146976564652012-09-22T00:24:13.631-05:002012-09-22T00:24:13.631-05:00A powerful excerpt Roland. Becca vs Maxine huh, fr...A powerful excerpt Roland. Becca vs Maxine huh, friends? Sounds like they form an alliance eventually. I, also, adore that Bette Midler song.<br />I enjoyed Hemingway on writing above, also.Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-66964340858730126082012-09-21T19:44:31.580-05:002012-09-21T19:44:31.580-05:00Alex:
Sometimes though I feel the spotlight on me!...Alex:<br />Sometimes though I feel the spotlight on me! :-)<br /><br />Nilanjana:<br />I think it's important to have a great start with a hook or laugh of a finish, don't you? I am so pleased that you liked this snippet.<br /><br />Scheherazade:<br />I laughed at that last line from Becca myself. She took full credit for it, of course!<br /><br />Candy:<br />Becca is getting a swell head from all the compliments on her last line! :-)<br /><br />Heather:<br />After a tiring, weary 400 mile day, your words about my entry made me smile wide. Thanks! I get to work all this weekend,too! Whew! 7 days straight is a killer!Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-1682542542136259302012-09-21T19:05:16.411-05:002012-09-21T19:05:16.411-05:00'Too many to kill', LOL, love that! Your w...'Too many to kill', LOL, love that! Your writing is like poetry Roland, it practically sings, this piece in particular. Well done!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-73265447307177620012012-09-21T14:35:34.680-05:002012-09-21T14:35:34.680-05:00Hope things are better with you. Great scene selec...Hope things are better with you. Great scene selection for the challenge. As others have said here in the comments, I'm loving that last line. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02691497935668743387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-34435910755895556642012-09-21T14:29:33.887-05:002012-09-21T14:29:33.887-05:00Well-written scene, especially the last line.Well-written scene, especially the last line.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-27412646135764075862012-09-21T10:53:29.607-05:002012-09-21T10:53:29.607-05:00Hello,
Riveting throughout, but really liked the b...Hello,<br />Riveting throughout, but really liked the beginning and the end. Intriguing excerpt..Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-67195407330454538502012-09-21T10:26:47.633-05:002012-09-21T10:26:47.633-05:00Well, thank God there's too many of us to kill...Well, thank God there's too many of us to kill!Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-81104797778137173312012-09-21T07:46:30.404-05:002012-09-21T07:46:30.404-05:00Suzanne:
Sometimes at ebb tide a treasure is revea...Suzanne:<br />Sometimes at ebb tide a treasure is revealed that we would never have seen when the tide was with us. I'm glad you enjoyed this snippet.<br /><br />Donna:<br />You know me too well! :-) "I hate my beautiful best friend" sounded like a prompt to me. And Trish transformed is beautiful ... and off with her boy friend ignoring poor Becca. :-(<br /><br />Kitty:<br />Maxine doesn't realize what a beautiful soul she has and how surrounded by those who care for her she is. How is Charlie doing?<br /><br />Michael:<br />Glad you liked my scene. How is the job mistreating you? Better I hope. :-)<br /><br />It is one of my favorite Bette Midler songs, too.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-78816826901633914262012-09-21T05:20:12.528-05:002012-09-21T05:20:12.528-05:00Seriously good scene you've written Roland!Seriously good scene you've written Roland! Michael Horvathhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06490946095047002839noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-42278081022624497732012-09-21T04:26:50.248-05:002012-09-21T04:26:50.248-05:00Yay!! Glad Maxine found some company and family!! ...Yay!! Glad Maxine found some company and family!! Go Girl!! Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-9336889799603964692012-09-21T02:11:10.935-05:002012-09-21T02:11:10.935-05:00I really liked this image: My skin almost jumped ...I really liked this image: My skin almost jumped off my skeleton.<br /><br />I knew there would be a trap, lol. But ya know, this isn't a FW/RU prompt. No competition, just evil loathing and vindictiveness.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing your excerpt Roland. Always a pleasure.<br /><br />And this is one of my favorite Bette Midler songs.<br /><br />......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-74618585070023391202012-09-21T01:41:00.271-05:002012-09-21T01:41:00.271-05:00I enjoyed reading this. Sad but uplifting in a str...I enjoyed reading this. Sad but uplifting in a strange way. Great writing.Suzanne Furnesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00908200156114453054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-53874230593387749212012-09-20T22:09:28.280-05:002012-09-20T22:09:28.280-05:00Yolanda:
Yes, Becca is a sardonic teen with miles ...Yolanda:<br />Yes, Becca is a sardonic teen with miles of sass! Lonely but afraid to show it.<br /><br />Nancy:<br />Becca and Maxine are two of the 7 "sisters" who fight Ragnarok in New Orleans, of all places, in END OF DAYS. Victor Standish even makes a showing in the adventure!Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-13367117324090251132012-09-20T21:57:33.464-05:002012-09-20T21:57:33.464-05:00Hi Roland
A character I haven't seen yet. Sar...Hi Roland<br />A character I haven't seen yet. Sarcasm is often a defense mechanism. You handled it well, playing each off the other. Well written as always. Love it.<br />NancyN. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-75586972832356398562012-09-20T21:44:34.542-05:002012-09-20T21:44:34.542-05:00Now that is definitely a different take on the fri...Now that is definitely a different take on the friendship theme. Love the line, "Men. You can't live with them, and they're too many to kill." <br />Great addition, thanks for sharing!Yolanda Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09085436784133103221noreply@blogger.com