tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post6959409980198939703..comments2024-03-28T23:31:06.181-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: GHOST OF A CHANCE_CHAPTER 19_WHEN THE DEVIL WEARS YOUR FACERoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-54481184436734788452010-08-25T16:10:04.596-05:002010-08-25T16:10:04.596-05:00Lucifer was created the most beautiful, most adore...Lucifer was created the most beautiful, most adored, and most important angel-he was head of praise and worship, head of the musical part of heaven. He was supposed to be the bright spot. <br /><br />Anyway, loved this beyond my ability to express. The back and forth, Roland's indomitable spirit, his rock solid beliefs, his courage....he probably seems like a giant that needs knocking down to characters like DayStar. Makes them feel as small as they must really be. <br /><br />You know I'm going to be looking for those clues this weekend, right?<br /><br />Beautiful insight to the character.The Words Crafterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14520267901489487512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-90512535740622428902010-08-25T11:05:22.947-05:002010-08-25T11:05:22.947-05:00I seriously loved the dialogue in this scene. Days...I seriously loved the dialogue in this scene. Daystar is so sharp tonged and I enjoyed the back and forth. And as always I enjoyed the descriptive but easy to read prose. AND the mounting drama...I love collecting clues.<br /><br />“Truth? Bah! Truth is what I say it is.”<br /><br />“You don’t look like President Obama.”<br /><br />So apt. So true.Nicole Murrayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09605448429334684845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-47729994347946836872010-08-24T00:09:20.750-05:002010-08-24T00:09:20.750-05:00Well done, Roland. The Adversity poster was a supe...Well done, Roland. The Adversity poster was a superb intro to this installment. I, too, loved the "life happens" dialogue. And I'm fascinated by the Daystar/Lucifer connection. I've always wondered how Lucifer could be the light bearer, but I know virtually nothing about angels. Piques my curiosity. Unlike a few other readers, the Obama quip pulled me out of the story. Roland's quick wit is present whenever he's in the scene, but the humor always tells us about his character. This line felt like a well-timed yet misplaced one-liner. Regardless, amazing work!VR Barkowskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04927993233682731113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-71024583251332028482010-08-23T22:43:26.840-05:002010-08-23T22:43:26.840-05:00I like the fact that I'm not quite sure if Day...I like the fact that I'm not quite sure if Daystar is delusional or not makes the story that much more interesting. Good call!Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-74921032222973064922010-08-23T19:53:25.658-05:002010-08-23T19:53:25.658-05:00I love the origin of the name Daystar--I had no id...I love the origin of the name Daystar--I had no idea! I love how real the voices sound in your writing. Excellent!Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-42167790099556245432010-08-23T17:25:23.434-05:002010-08-23T17:25:23.434-05:00Terry : Thanks for the praise. That last statement...Terry : Thanks for the praise. That last statement comes close to my personal code. Guess that's whmy Avatar said it.<br /><br />Elliot : Congrats on finishing the revision without it finishing you. Your supportive comments help my flagging spirits.<br /><br />Teenage Bride I'm happy you like my blog and post. I liked yours as well. Don't be a stranger.<br /><br />LTM : I dropped by your blog and commented on your thought-provoking post. Way to go.<br /><br />Slushpile : DayStar is challenging to write. I hear Anthony Hopkins when he speaks. Thanks for liking his narrative voice.<br /><br />Donna : Congrats on becoming published!!Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-60158842450535757782010-08-23T17:07:08.779-05:002010-08-23T17:07:08.779-05:00So many great thoughts! This is my favorite graph:...So many great thoughts! This is my favorite graph:<br /><br />“Life happens,” I said. “So does death. Like the tides I can’t stop them. I can only be the change I want in the world.”Terry Stonecrophttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03726985400500572770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-80264990967360195862010-08-23T16:52:49.404-05:002010-08-23T16:52:49.404-05:00...love the Obama comment! Timed it like a sinker ......love the Obama comment! Timed it like a sinker ball on a two strike count. <br /><br />Donna's correct in saying that your strength is descriptive pose. It's what urges a reader to visit often.<br /><br />Well done as always.Elliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-10578313312402550042010-08-23T13:27:56.830-05:002010-08-23T13:27:56.830-05:00what an awesome post. thanks for folowing my blog....what an awesome post. thanks for folowing my blog. I look forward to reading more of yours.Jillianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04185423759021869130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-73550540487767014222010-08-23T11:45:14.168-05:002010-08-23T11:45:14.168-05:00amazing as always~ And LOL at your initial poster....amazing as always~ And LOL at your initial poster... !<br /><br />I wonder what the ghost of Roland might have to say about my blog post today. I would love to hear his (or Sam's or Ernie's) thoughts~ :o)LTMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05239077455322030275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-7690308498048036212010-08-23T11:22:03.368-05:002010-08-23T11:22:03.368-05:00Damn Roland! You are not at a loss for powerful wo...Damn Roland! You are not at a loss for powerful words...I love the narrative voice of Daystar! Keep writing!angelarenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13639436719051155045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-29008488184861864252010-08-23T10:22:10.079-05:002010-08-23T10:22:10.079-05:00Donna : Thanks for commenting, giving me your take...Donna : Thanks for commenting, giving me your take on how I'm succeeding in making a serial comprehensible. <br /><br />Les Edgerton reminded us some days back that a book is a long journey. Agents want to know if we have it in us to complete such a journey in a professional, timely fashion.<br /><br />They look for clues. One such clue could well be how regular our blog posts are. Do we maintain creativity from post to post? Do we strive to tweak the interest of our readers each post?<br /><br />I really appreciate such an indepth look at my post, Donna. It appears life has been challenging for you of late. I hope things at work go smoothly for awhile for you. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-76801708532189636132010-08-23T03:31:02.527-05:002010-08-23T03:31:02.527-05:00I can relate to the initial blog pix. I like it. ...I can relate to the initial blog pix. I like it. I may have to lift it for a future post of my own.<br /><br /> - -<br />He face screwed up. “Truth? Bah! Truth is what I say it is.”<br /><br />“You don’t look like President Obama.”<br /> - -<br />I like that bit of dialogue. Very apt.<br /><br />Sorry its taken me so long to drop by Roland - I've been busy with some writing adventures of my own lately. I can't really catch up on all the posts over the last week - my, are you ever diligent to your blog - but I'm enjoying this post immensely.<br /><br />It seems you are a master at serial writing. I know I've missed a few important events, but I also feel you've written this series in a manner that allows each post to stand alone. I don't feel too lost.<br /><br />I really wanted to watch the video, but I'm having some blogger problems and nothing is loading correctly - even on my own site. CURSES!!<br /><br />Anyway . . it seems you are at the climax of your series here. Some plot questions are being answered - asked, at least, in a leading format - and the character plots are coming clear. Without backpedalling and reading the last week, I'm getting the feeling that Marlene is not as innocent as she appeared at first writing.<br /><br />An intriguing mystery that. You've done a good summation of the relevant plot points in this excerpt, which is why I feel so caught up. I like that in a mystery. Sometimes, even when I read cover to cover all the way through on a mystery novel - I forget some plot points, and feel as if I need to go back and reread the novel - taking sufficient notes - to catch myself up.<br /><br />Not so this mystery. You're doing an excellent job of keeping the reader informed without rehashing all the convoluted hints. I still have some figuring out to do on my own - but it doesn't seem an impossible task.<br /><br />To me, that is an awesome feat. Mystery genre is not my first choice for reading pleasure b/c of the complicated plots and subplots - but I do love puzzles. This has been an interesting, fun series.<br /><br />Your writing strength is this, IMO, has been the descriptive prose: His eyes said he wanted to rip off my lips; He stood there calmly, but his shadow flexed its fingers, then clenched them. And that creeped me out more than I can say; He gazed towards a horizon only he could see; He sighed as if at some addled child; He glared at me with my own eyes, unnerving the hell out of me,<br /><br />Not all the phrases I liked, but you get my drift I hope. I truly wish I could think like that. Your verbiage always sticks in my mind, long after I shut down the computer. Its why I come here last on my blog rounds; to spend time and enjoy and let it steep my dreams.<br /><br />Catch you around more often now, I hope.<br /><br />............dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.com