tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post838733379242132061..comments2024-03-29T03:28:22.296-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: RAINY DAY BLOGFEST_YOU CAN ONLY SPEND IT ONCE_GHOST OF A CHANCE InterludeRoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-84868454959301842042010-08-27T21:29:39.312-05:002010-08-27T21:29:39.312-05:00"As we stepped out into the night's light..."As we stepped out into the night's light mist of rain, the black fog curled and creamed in the muggy air like a demon from the Other Side trying to take shape.<br /><br />Crucified high in the sable sky, the moon of blood admired its reflection on the dark waters of the still flooded street."<br /><br />Yep, these lines grabbed me, hook, line, and sinker. Very compelling piece...nice work!roh morgonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06823641709307631626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-45461009380756291992010-08-26T06:14:40.981-05:002010-08-26T06:14:40.981-05:00Stunning imagery, Roland. You have an extraordinar...Stunning imagery, Roland. You have an extraordinary way with words.Alison Pearce Stevenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955543150406880055noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-66503542865949327242010-08-25T23:39:43.444-05:002010-08-25T23:39:43.444-05:00As always, I am humbled. Your writing is achingly ...As always, I am humbled. Your writing is achingly beautiful.<br /><br />~<a href="http://thatrebelwithablog.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">that rebel, Olivia</a>Olivia J. Herrell, writing as O.J. Barréhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01107021392937169669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-74621748231177283342010-08-25T18:27:37.014-05:002010-08-25T18:27:37.014-05:00Hi Roland. To start off, I like your blog title a...Hi Roland. To start off, I like your blog title and header, they really pull me in. I also like: "Dreamer. Writer. Believer in the worth of each soul," in your About Me section. This short piece is good stuff. I hope to have the courage to share a few "creative pieces" like this on my blog some day. Keep up the good work. I'll be back!Margaret Duartehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16105309340849038764noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-59441515912766705012010-08-25T18:27:21.788-05:002010-08-25T18:27:21.788-05:00Wow, this was chillingly beautiful. Thanks for sha...Wow, this was chillingly beautiful. Thanks for sharing. Love it!Brenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-89003475720555798942010-08-25T18:23:02.762-05:002010-08-25T18:23:02.762-05:00Lovely, lovely imagery.Lovely, lovely imagery.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04283371140346602856noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-71715252295327971842010-08-25T16:51:29.529-05:002010-08-25T16:51:29.529-05:00"Crucified high in the sable sky, the moon of..."Crucified high in the sable sky, the moon of blood admired its reflection on the dark waters of the still flooded street.<br /><br />Ripples of its long bloody image flowed from the floating dead body of a dog, like tiny red streams bleeding from its lonely soul."<br /><br />You have a way of taking what should be ugly, gross, and scary and making it beautiful; wringing from sorrow the echoes of life before. Sublime. I am moved.<br /><br />Thank you so very much for your words on my post-your concern and caring mean a lot to me. I yessir-ed your 'should have...' and grinned at your confession. Advice duly noted and will follow up asap. Promise.The Words Crafterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14520267901489487512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-12804978283714444952010-08-25T16:18:08.227-05:002010-08-25T16:18:08.227-05:00That image of the bloody moon's reflection pou...That image of the bloody moon's reflection pouring out from the dead dog...whoa! You are such a wonderful artist with the imagery. Great post, Roland!<br /><br /><b><a href="http://nitewriter6.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Edge of Your Seat Romance</a></b>Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-50202921024466070202010-08-25T16:13:17.796-05:002010-08-25T16:13:17.796-05:00This is haunting, Roland. The broadcast images of ...This is haunting, Roland. The broadcast images of Katrina will be with me always. It was like watching a loved one dying in agony and not being able to help. You've captured all the horror but somehow managed to temper it with your beautiful use of language.<br /><br /><i>"I looked up into the endless sable depths between the stars. I felt like the wolf staring up into the dark universe, who never learns why he must live like he does. But still he sings to the moon. One lonely spirit to another."</i> <br /><br />Gorgeous!VR Barkowskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04927993233682731113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-20258408332263912372010-08-25T15:27:14.183-05:002010-08-25T15:27:14.183-05:00Roland - I love how you paint a picture with words...Roland - I love how you paint a picture with words. Wonderful. =DRaShelle Workmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582252557500502186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-90811673321570594752010-08-25T14:58:18.572-05:002010-08-25T14:58:18.572-05:00Love, love, love. I'm kind of agreeing with T...Love, love, love. I'm kind of agreeing with Ted, bot not really. I, for one, want you to keep "the ship at sea" and lose the one right before it - why? Reason 1: You don't need them both, your writing is way to good. Reason 2: You have already used "moon metaphors" and, the ship at sea made me feel far more "lost". <br /><br />Very masterful. This could have been distatefull for the reader because of the subject matter, but I have to agree, you found a way to tell it "beautifully".<br /><br />Thanks for sharing, thanks for the privilege.Wendy Tyler Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10841984342368861282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-41147982708568661472010-08-25T14:07:58.014-05:002010-08-25T14:07:58.014-05:00"As intimate as a knife fight"! That'..."As intimate as a knife fight"! That's fantastic. This piece was chock full of evocative phrases. Dramatic and poetic.Franklin Beaumonthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17950277803662347842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-3052043777502618952010-08-25T13:12:45.960-05:002010-08-25T13:12:45.960-05:00So many beautiful, yet tragic images. How you mana...So many beautiful, yet tragic images. How you manage to mix it all up, I don't know. Your writing has such depth and feeling.Terry Stonecrophttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03726985400500572770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-60029433008740970252010-08-25T11:43:06.591-05:002010-08-25T11:43:06.591-05:00Nicely done. I read this paragraph over and over:
...Nicely done. I read this paragraph over and over:<br /><br />"As we stepped out into the night's light mist of rain, the black fog curled and creamed in the muggy air like a demon from the Other Side trying to take shape."<br /><br /> - EricEric W. Tranthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13842968931062056407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-55060170713937511322010-08-25T11:42:15.616-05:002010-08-25T11:42:15.616-05:00I know there are so many other haunting and distur...I know there are so many other haunting and disturbingly beautiful images I can summon within when reading your work, but all I could focus on while I read this was...when did the stench of death dissipate after Katrina? The realist in me once again canceling out the romantic.<br /><br />What a crappy way for me to say that your work effects with its vivid imagery. As always, thank you for sharing with us and remember to sleep.Nicole Murrayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09605448429334684845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-26229460223400317542010-08-25T08:35:21.678-05:002010-08-25T08:35:21.678-05:00organized and descriptive postorganized and descriptive postimagery imaginedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07291852147832887334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-77772292342092389172010-08-25T05:05:35.713-05:002010-08-25T05:05:35.713-05:00"Seasons of the soul" - I like that!
Ta..."Seasons of the soul" - I like that!<br /><br />Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-72012629727554269242010-08-25T04:47:55.038-05:002010-08-25T04:47:55.038-05:00Vivid imagery. Your special talent Roland - to ma...Vivid imagery. Your special talent Roland - to make a scene come alive with all its haunting devastation. <br /><br />I would not have been so brave as to linger in the aftermath of Katrina as you did.<br /><br />Beautiful prose; lets us know the horrendous nature of weather. Lest we forget. . <br /><br />......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-91426339029939184862010-08-25T01:40:59.468-05:002010-08-25T01:40:59.468-05:00Vivid and grim. I am terrible at using metaphors/a...Vivid and grim. I am terrible at using metaphors/analogies in my writing, but you do them so well. I did think that you didn't need the 'ship lost at sea' when you already had the moon one.Ted Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09022309459554237650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-29208123522291409982010-08-25T01:15:36.956-05:002010-08-25T01:15:36.956-05:00Amanda : Thanks for that compliment. I work hard t...Amanda : Thanks for that compliment. I work hard to impact the reader, and that I succeeded with you means a lot. I have to race out into the night again on a STAT. Whew. I need a vacation!Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-65260971536337373532010-08-25T00:59:51.503-05:002010-08-25T00:59:51.503-05:00You are one of the few writers I know who can make...You are one of the few writers I know who can make the grim, the desolate, the tragic beautiful. <3Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com