tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post8798876512618393634..comments2024-03-25T05:17:05.202-05:00Comments on Writing In The Crosshairs: NEVER CAGE A WILD WOLF_CLIFFHANGER BLOGFEST entryRoland D. Yeomanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-38301908183070149952010-10-28T12:54:25.152-05:002010-10-28T12:54:25.152-05:00Wendy : I made it over the word count on purpose. ...Wendy : I made it over the word count on purpose. I don't like competing against my friends. I did it for the fun of racing along with my buddies and for sharing.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-44580086957051665392010-10-27T17:03:37.707-05:002010-10-27T17:03:37.707-05:00You never cease to amaze me. This was an excellent...You never cease to amaze me. This was an excellent piece, if it wasn't over the word count, it would've been a top contender. Thanks for participating and sharing your awesome story with us! :DBrenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-50959617439267206192010-10-26T15:41:38.018-05:002010-10-26T15:41:38.018-05:00Once again, you are fabulous. Seriously there isn&...Once again, you are fabulous. Seriously there isn't anything else to say. <br /><br />JJodi Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216373059861459896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-59742217788734863232010-10-26T15:33:18.286-05:002010-10-26T15:33:18.286-05:00Roland~
I love the end question and the answer giv...Roland~<br />I love the end question and the answer given. Great job at being captivating as usual. I love the fact that the old woman didn't have a shadow and Sam commented starngely about it in a funny way. well done.<br />I did notice you have alot of "had" in here specially towards the beginning and middle that can be dropped and make your sentences read stronger.<br />my example: "I had saved him from a nightmare come to life when he'd been twelve. I had kept track of him all these years. Now, he was thirty-one."<br />This is your sentence, try taking out both "had" and see how it reads to you.<br />Great post!Summer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-17972552198769127952010-10-26T14:04:43.752-05:002010-10-26T14:04:43.752-05:00Oh, this was a nice snippet of your story that I d...Oh, this was a nice snippet of your story that I didn't expect. I always love wondering who you'll pull into your universe...Pele...of course. =)<br /><br />Always the hard way, huh? Figures.<br /><b><a href="http://nitewriter6.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Edge of Your Seat Romance</a></b>Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-72248337684738772292010-10-26T05:07:50.059-05:002010-10-26T05:07:50.059-05:00Hi,
Thankfully I'm in this blogfest merely fo...Hi,<br /><br />Thankfully I'm in this blogfest merely for the fun not the winning of, because this piece is a sure vote winner. <br /><br />Just adore the wolf-dog imagery, but I would because I have one (hybrid GSD/wolf), and I love the way this flowed with your usual poetic leanings. Very touching scene and great cliffhanger! ;<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-38612628862184331182010-10-26T02:38:28.008-05:002010-10-26T02:38:28.008-05:00Hey Roland, very clever piece. Most intriguing!!! ...Hey Roland, very clever piece. Most intriguing!!! Glad you entered the blog fest :)<br /><br />RachRachael Harriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16764930101064527321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-29826259177344654672010-10-25T21:01:44.524-05:002010-10-25T21:01:44.524-05:00Ooo...I like this. I like that the dog seemed to d...Ooo...I like this. I like that the dog seemed to demand attention. Whether it was a dog or a horse. Nice.E. Arroyohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06634213563563094173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-36321383104500251932010-10-25T19:49:36.918-05:002010-10-25T19:49:36.918-05:00L'Aussie : Thanks for that great comment. I wa...L'Aussie : Thanks for that great comment. I was afraid it was too lyrical at the start for this blogfest, but I liked it so I went with it. <br /><br />JEFritz : I'm glad you had fun reading this. Would you believe Mark Twain gets abducted by those pesky gray aliens of THE FOURTH KIND?<br /><br />Brenda : High Five, huh? I'm as pleased as Mark Twain viewing the CanCan at the Moulin Rouge.<br />Thanks.<br /><br />Wendy : Your praise means a lot to me. And "hard" is the only way Sam knows how to deal with threats to his friends.<br /><br />Heather : The lyrical blending of chills, reflection, and tension was what I was going for. Your words make me feel like I achieved what I wanted. Thanks.<br /><br />Shallee : I'm pleased my snippet entertained you. Yes, that dog was creepy. He is the Father of All Grims and appears also in my Native American/Celtic fable, THE BEAR WITH TWO SHADOWS.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-57632411853795612482010-10-25T18:33:14.975-05:002010-10-25T18:33:14.975-05:00Hey Roland what chance has anyone got of winning t...Hey Roland what chance has anyone got of winning this with you on board, huh?? Great flowing prose as always. Drew me right in. High five indeed!Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-12905077877695733302010-10-25T17:20:53.842-05:002010-10-25T17:20:53.842-05:00Very interesting and detailed. I really wish I cou...Very interesting and detailed. I really wish I could see what happens next:) Vivid writing, a lot of fun to read.J E Fritzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03372746219262163566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-57893016970608681432010-10-25T12:58:48.726-05:002010-10-25T12:58:48.726-05:00Thanks for participating! We've judged your en...Thanks for participating! We've judged your entry. o/\o *high five*Brenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-24081836419061624492010-10-25T11:26:43.342-05:002010-10-25T11:26:43.342-05:00I agree with Heather. When I started reading, it ...I agree with Heather. When I started reading, it very much had a poetic feel, even more so than usual. Nice way to end it and I think we know what kind of "hard", hard is. <br /><br />Hope you are feeling well.Wendy Tyler Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10841984342368861282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-16567318695078805922010-10-25T10:24:08.737-05:002010-10-25T10:24:08.737-05:00The one's we write for our own amusement alway...The one's we write for our own amusement always seem to be the best ones! This one gave me chills. I loved the poetic feel mixed with the rising tension!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-20924434773731695752010-10-25T09:54:31.242-05:002010-10-25T09:54:31.242-05:00Thanks for sharing your piece! Very interesting, a...Thanks for sharing your piece! Very interesting, and that dog was quite creepy!Shalleehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09907680428735740943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-6118025220465534932010-10-24T14:49:37.231-05:002010-10-24T14:49:37.231-05:00Roland,
Thanks so much for stopping by the blog an...Roland,<br />Thanks so much for stopping by the blog and following it. I read your comment. Don't worry; I'm not too great with technology either but I'm hoping perhaps some others can help me out with the confusing process.<br /><br />Have a wonderful Sunday and I'll try to stop again when I get the chance.<br />--LindseyLindsey Richardsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05479405614100115901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-47266585878056275402010-10-24T14:40:17.554-05:002010-10-24T14:40:17.554-05:00Words Crafter : Pele is the daughter of the Turquo...Words Crafter : Pele is the daughter of the Turquoise Woman in my mythos. Rind, the Angelus of Death, has her blood mingled in Sam's veins. But he is on his own with demigods.<br /><br />LRenees : I visited your blog and site. I wish you nothing but success with your series -- and with your self-teaching in how to make a trailer.<br /><br />Hey, my friends out there, go visit her site and if you know a cliff note version of how to make a book trailer email me and LReneeS with the details ... please.<br /><br />Donna : For someone who likes Nightwish, Within Temptation, and Leaves' Eyes, Korn oddly did not appeal to me except for the bagpipes at the beginning <br /><br />And right there you see how off my musical tastes are : bag pipes? Who but me likes those?<br /><br />Have a great Sunday everyone.Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-11762458307634727462010-10-24T10:41:15.958-05:002010-10-24T10:41:15.958-05:00You're invited to read about the magic.
www.t...You're invited to read about the magic.<br /><br />www.themagiciansseries.blogspot.com<br />Hope to see you there and PLEASE help me spread the word.<br />--LindseyLindsey Richardsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05479405614100115901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-43878998506045278992010-10-24T06:59:33.894-05:002010-10-24T06:59:33.894-05:00German shepherds are my favorite breed of dogs and...German shepherds are my favorite breed of dogs and they're not small. But that one would have had me shaking in my shoes!<br /><br />I agree with Donna in that hard is the only way Sam tends to do things. But, doesn't Death already run in his veins?The Words Crafterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14520267901489487512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8681132888977525688.post-17911945823460647302010-10-24T03:11:45.947-05:002010-10-24T03:11:45.947-05:00That fire goddess music is kinda haunting. I coul...That fire goddess music is kinda haunting. I could listen to the Kitaro while I'm finishing up this read thought.<br /><br />Tomorrow - or, a, later today. Didn't sound like you enjoy Korn much? They are a bit rough :)<br /><br />I liked the last line of your story: "Hard" Is there any other way for Sam to do things?<br /><br />Vivid characterization, as always. These three beings come alive with a history, and a future. Well done.<br /><br />Take it easy the next couple days. Hope all is going well with your recovery.<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.com